Lovers’ Cliché

[JaredEggo]

There are a lot of emotions in this and I like that; love in the beginning, frustration in the middle, acceptance, and hope for the friend in the end. I do think there a smoother transition between each emotion, but very good overall. I've given a few other suggestions below.

Lovers’ Cliché
REVISED 9/14/16
Written 4/20/16
 
You found me in the rain,
soaking wet like some cliché.
 
Once enraptured with your love,
now the fluttery feelings have gone away.     I think "fluttery" breaks the rhythm of the line, and "enraptured" already catches the emotions of the moment.

 What the hell happened,
my fancy free friend?     I'm not entirely sure how "fancy-free" fits here. Perhaps using a personal quality instead of relationship status.

 Is your heart made of stone?
 
My heart rests in the place we met.     Maybe use a line break after "rests".
 
I could love you,
but I will leave you alone
 
For you,     I feel like this line is unneeded.
 
I hope the waters that fill your cup
are sweet and to its brim.
 
That sunlight finds you,
and glows warm against your skin.
 
I hope that you remember when
we stood soaking in the rain,
and you will call me friend.     This line seems in conflict, at least in part, to the line "I will leave you".
 
***Author's note: Tried my hand at a rewrite taking into consideration a few of the critiques that others had for my poetry.***