The seals in Yemen
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I think you need a line about how trump could have stopped a helicopter from crashing. I also think could do with some historical perspective about how micromanager presidents have been extremely effective. Maybe evoke some examples of how there is zero inertia in government.... or some allusionary examples of there are zero people providing advice to military leaders and no president in the history of the united states has had a mission go wrong.

Just need a little clean up, otherwise it's a interesting poem. There's an easy case to be made for what the poem feels, but the yemen deal, idunnoboutthat. Defunding planned parenthood or nominating whatshersnatch secretary of education are far bigger mistakes, and more cruel.
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The seals in Yemen - by just mercedes - 02-03-2017, 05:57 PM
RE: The seals in Yemen - by Erthona - 02-04-2017, 02:39 AM
RE: The seals in Yemen - by Achebe - 02-05-2017, 07:28 AM
RE: The seals in Yemen - by QDeathstar - 02-05-2017, 10:33 AM



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