Bath Time

[dukealien]

I wrote this poem just for fun. Many poems I read deal with very serious stuff. I thought it is a good idea to do something lighter.
The rhyme took on 'a mind of its own' leading the poem in directions I did not plan in advance.
Maybe, that's part of the fun of poetry.

Bath Time
    
Ah, a bath. I find this line hard to read aloud (or with lips moving).  "First, a hot bath?"
Turn on the tap
later a nap
Then to dine "Then on to dine?"
Maybe have some wine  "Perhaps have some wine?"
let the mind wander,
To places, here, there and yonder.
To momentarily feel
Memories so fine  If this could be rewritten to match rhythm with the previous line, it would be great fun.
You wish you could  [see below]
Go backward in time.  comma instead of period here?
Remembering:
Seeing the farmer saying the hay  not familiar with this expression - "saving" or "laying" vs. "saying?"
Watching the mother baking all day
Listening to water splashing onto rocks reads well as "List'ning" - could it be "Listen?"  also "splash onto" or "splasing on?"
Seeing big boats pulling into square docks. .
Gazing at goldsmiths fixing a clock
Staring at stockbrokers counting their stock
Looking at goods I wish I could pawn
Awed at fog hiding the dawn
Shocked at stars twinkling so bright  a better word than "twinkling" - blazing or scattered?
Squinting at summer sunsets sublime
Having a good time all of the time.  "Having good times... ?"

In basic critique, all of the above are suggestions only.  It's a wistful, occasionally funny poem.  Many of the lines have a strong, similar rhythm (almost meter) and others diverge, often without a purpose I could see (for example, water on rocks is a good divergence, as is fixing a clock - appropriate jumble in the first, pause to stare in the other).  "Squinting at summer..." has nice alliteration but sags after "summer" - the break there is not as useful (as I read it).

"You wish you could" is the only place this construction is used, so a little jarring ("I wish I could" would be even more so).   Perhaps rebalance with the following line, "Wishing to go/backward in time" to preserve the masked/deniable first person that could arguable third person?

The combination of free verse with frequent end-rhymes is unusual (in my limited experience) but is probably better - especially in a nostalgic poem like this - than forcing end-rhymes or fixed meter.  A rewrite is in order, seeing how this evolved from beginning to end (presumably) as it was written.  Now rewrite it backwards so beginning and end match, finishing up with a new (or now more appropriate) title?

Have fun!

P.S. Beginning each line with a capital letter regardless of sentence structure is discommended on this site, though I personally see little wrong with it.