01-31-2017, 08:52 AM
Hi.
The uneven rhyme scheme and "Hey, Listen Here" along with the tired theming of fascism make this poem read a bit pompous... Who are you trying to reach? Do you think for a second anyone you are trying to reach is going to read past the first stanza? Now, you could shout IGNORANCE if you wish, but for me, a poet writes to convey a message and if your message cannot be delivered, well, what's the point. Im struggling to find something unique or original here. My personal views are different from yours, so maybe that is biasing my critique, but it just feels like i've read this same poem every time some republican starts a war the liberals don't like.
The fifth stanza is the strongest, the rest of them are very tired. Run-on rhetorical questions in poetry are superfluous... not that i haven't been guilty of making that same mistake.
Thanks for reminding me about this poem!
The uneven rhyme scheme and "Hey, Listen Here" along with the tired theming of fascism make this poem read a bit pompous... Who are you trying to reach? Do you think for a second anyone you are trying to reach is going to read past the first stanza? Now, you could shout IGNORANCE if you wish, but for me, a poet writes to convey a message and if your message cannot be delivered, well, what's the point. Im struggling to find something unique or original here. My personal views are different from yours, so maybe that is biasing my critique, but it just feels like i've read this same poem every time some republican starts a war the liberals don't like.
The fifth stanza is the strongest, the rest of them are very tired. Run-on rhetorical questions in poetry are superfluous... not that i haven't been guilty of making that same mistake.
Thanks for reminding me about this poem!