My past year. Also my first submission on the site :)

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My past year. Also my first submission on the site :)

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01-29-2017, 11:08 AM

hello, scribner. I think you're overdoing the refrain.

also, you should look at cutting each line to half its length.

~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe

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My past year. Also my first submission on the site :) - by Scribner1 - 01-29-2017, 10:37 AM

RE: My past year. Also my first submission on the site :) - by Achebe - 01-29-2017, 11:08 AM

RE: My past year. Also my first submission on the site :) - by Scribner1 - 01-29-2017, 11:26 AM

RE: My past year. Also my first submission on the site :) - by billy - 01-29-2017, 12:09 PM

RE: My past year. Also my first submission on the site :) - by bestoweroflight - 01-31-2017, 07:34 AM

RE: My past year. Also my first submission on the site :) - by Wonderfullife - 02-03-2017, 04:23 AM

RE: My past year. Also my first submission on the site :) - by nibbed - 02-24-2017, 06:01 AM

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