Walkabout - Edit

[mrweiner]

Edit 1:

In the pet store, her eyes 
matched the puppy’s. Nice reworking of this stanza.

Outside a coffee house Could possibly change "a" to "the" to mirror the other stanzas. Might also make it feel like a more specific memory.
a busker played Hank Williams, Also thinking that dropping the comma and "and" could help tighten this up, but I think it works great as it is, as well.
and she gave him a cigarette.

My boots were damp from the previous night’s rain
and a fog hugged the worms on the sidewalk.

You might be able to combine your initial stanza November and this new one, although you'd ditch the worms. Something like:

November fog hugged my boots,
still damp from last night's rain.

In this case, you could also shift it to the second stanza to set the scene without turning your busker into a worman. That being said, it's kind of nice to have the line "outside a coffee house" prior to setting the outside scene, as it probably makes more sense for it to be foggy outside than foggy in the pet store. 

You could also even change "my boots" to "our boots", or include her in another way, since I'm noticing that this is the only stanza where she doesn't appear. 

When we got to the park,
she said some trees look better
without their leaves.