Going to Long John Silvers

[dukealien]

I’m going to Long John Silvers, where I’ll blow my brains away.
Holy lord almighty, what a hell of a day.
 
Got caught up in a hook and snag,  missing rhyme here?  or reference?
and I lost some money at the old horse track,
guzzled down whiskey in the bright midday,
‘til the blinding sun blazoned bright dismay.
 
I’m going to Long John Silvers, where I’ll blow my brains away.
Holy lord almighty, what a hell of a day.
 
Said to myself I wouldn’t turn on the car,
but the liquor store didn’t seem that far,
took off my mirror swiping a mailbox,
then I slithered home to a couple big shots.
 
I’m going to Long John Silvers, where I’ll blow my brains away.
Holy lord almighty, what a hell of a day.
 
Drenched myself, made my lips real dry,
and I gasped out slow that I’m ready to die,
reached in the sock where I kept my glock,
decided just to end all the guilt in one shot.
 
I’m going to Long John Silvers, where I’ll blow my brains away.
Holy lord almighty, what a hell of a day.
 
I’m going to Long John Silvers, on the congested freeway,
going to Long John Silvers, all you swimming fish make way,
I’m going away, I’ve decided my fate,
determined the time when I’ll lay prostrate.  This should be "lie" - I'll lay to that!
 
I’m going to Long John Silvers, where I’ll blow my brains away.
Holy lord almighty, what a hell

Very amusing rant/rap.  Those who have experienced a serious hangover's warring compulsions to get something into the stomach, preferrably greasy, and to avoid eating anything at all (since it will be back real soon) will especially sympathize.

The obvious apparent flaw in the rhyme scheme puzzles me (first line after the initial refrain, "snag...track").  Is "snag" to be pronounced "snack," or "track" to be "tag?"  On the whole, since one of the subjects is food, I favor the former - but am probably missing a reference whch would explain it.  Google replies to "hook and snag" with "snag hook," a three-armed fishhook; if the viewpoint character is thinking of himself as a fish (also suggested by ordering [other] fish out of the way in the final verse) that could be it.  Or was it perhaps "smack?"

Minor corrections: in the last verse-line ("...when I'll lay prostrate") it should, strictly speaking, be "lie" - but "lay" contains an echo of the pirate's "I'll lay to that" so fits in with the LJS theme.  A similar tetchy correction would be to capitalize "[G]lock," but this is probably admissible speaking generically of any common automatic (a "nine," that is) even if it happens to be a SIG, S&W, or Mauser.  These are not serious objections.

The structure is quite effective - can hear it sing (or rap).

after posting this, will look at the previous critique