The Fires of Betrayal

[Brownlie]

Just trying to give you stuff to help edits. 

The Fires of Betrayal.

I saw betrayal happen -- Do you need the word happen?
right before my eyes  -- Is this line redundant? How else could you see betrayal except with your eyes? The next line gets pretty deep, but could you remove this line and say the same thing? It's whatever you want I guess.
before my eyes saw it 
coming. 

It's deep inside 
where I saw it occur -- Can't figure out what "it" is referring to. Possibly intentional.
while manifesting into 
a physical occurrence, -- If something manifests, is it already showing up as something physical? Do you need the word occurrence?
a day, or days that ensued.
 
I accepted the ramifications 
but the matured ram's horns - pun
already pierced the target.  

I forgave the wrongdoings 
by memory of my own.
I'm surely not the only 
being to be of fault, -- at fault? or of fault?
or perhaps I sought Being
by perceiving the moment as 
lessons I should learn.

Not forgiving.
Unaware of Being.

Purposeful deceptions,
by my own diligent mind
that is separate of who is really to come.
A real me. 

She did not cause the pain I feel.
I implanted it before she ever could,
for my own bearings did not match -- I am biased against using for like this. it's a fanboys but sounds like phrases such as "for to go to"
the predicted weight. 

she did in fact, trigger what was planted.
My own trap, a trap to burn.
Burn the seams, burn the cords, burn the foundations. 

Set ablaze to all that was constructed.
Each screw, every rod, every brick. 
Carrying a great weight of consciousness on top.
File cabinets stacked next to each other. Heirlooms I promised to cherish in my eternity -- I like the file cabinets makes a metaphor for minds 

Books and pictures. Categorized in neat piles. 
Black boxes engraved with the words "caution" 

All ablaze. 
All turned to ash.
All set to die.

My own betrayal. 
My own trap.
My own bridge. 

My biggest gripes might be from lack of thought on my end.  lines seem like they could be reduced, such as stuff like seen before my eyes. The other problem seemed sort of ironic. On one hand, there was a lot of explaining like telling and not showing. On the other hand, there were some things that were unclear. Besides offering a pun, what do the rams horns add? Also, why bring in the philosophical concept of being without simply illustrating some existential belief or something?

I liked the file cabinets burning. That seemed like a cool metaphor. Thanks for posting.