Assyrian New Year’s Toast - edit

[MadelineAnne]

Hi dukealien! I like how unexpected the imagery is.

Assyrian New Year’s Toast

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Our calendars change, our watches are set. -- I don't think you need 'are.' Or you could change 'set' to something else to keep the symmetry of three words, separated by a comma
This promising New Year runs before us  -- I don't think you need promising -- I'd do "The New Year runs before us."
like a defeated host,
a lion wounded with arrows. -- love the idea that the New Year brings rich reward that can be attained through some effort
Pursue it in haste,
hot caution and joy - 'hot caution' is such a interesting combo -- I like it
with vengeance held in our hands!

Our calendars change, our watches are set.
This promising New Year runs before us
like a defeated army, (a)
lion wounded with arrows.
Pursue it in haste,
hot caution and joy -
with vengeance held in our hands!