Tulips (Sound poetry experimentation)

[MadelineAnne]

Experimenting with sound and word meaning with this short piece. Thoughts/critique/interpretation is appreciated.

Two lips bloh eeng -- two lips blowing
a gay nst pur -- against per-
mid able tear or– midable terror

Two lips luh king -- two lips looking
at hue man diz ass tur– at human disaster

Two lips stahn ding two lips standing
uh mung an en din sigh t. among an ending sight

Ok, I'd tried to interpret the words, let me know if I got anything wrong.

I like the image in the first stanza, because it's lip related. Lips don't look or stand, so I have trouble with the imagery in those stanzas.

I don't think permidable is a word. Did you mean permeable?

Among an ending sight confuses me too.

Over all I like the concept. I would keep the imagery lip related, though.

Hope this helps.