On Cats - Edit 2
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(01-23-2017, 10:16 AM)mrweiner Wrote:  I'm mad,
or at least I'm I like these flipped syllables in this stanza 'or' and 'no', 'i'm and 'my'
headed that direction,
no longer at the helm of my
own thoughts.really like this first stanza

Before,
lonliness was
normal as morning dew. Not sure really how normal morning dew is.
My everpresent companion. Is the morning dew always around?
Silent.

But now
I cannot seem 
to make coffee or takethis line was awkward for me at first
a walk without her joining from ending line on 'from' seems weak
afar;

smoothly
sliding her way
through my thoughts -- like a cat
between plants in a windowsill
garden. Like this image

Of course
I welcome her,
but I know what it's like
when you're used to petting a cat
but can't.of madness, I really like tying the loneliness even to missing a pet, since you can register them as service animals to cheer spirits.
Interesting choice in form, what I like is I think this could work in almost any form, even read as a paragraph.  Overall it's nice to look at, and the title works because the cats are mentioned at the bottom of the piece, and everything else is on top, 'on cats'
Peanut butter honey banana sandwiches
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On Cats - Edit 2 - by mrweiner - 01-23-2017, 10:16 AM
RE: On Cats - by CRNDLSM - 01-23-2017, 10:41 PM
RE: On Cats - by mrweiner - 01-24-2017, 02:22 AM
RE: On Cats - by Donald Q. - 01-24-2017, 08:24 AM
RE: On Cats - by mrweiner - 01-24-2017, 09:22 AM
RE: On Cats - by rollingbrianjones - 01-24-2017, 12:44 PM
RE: On Cats - by mrweiner - 01-25-2017, 02:02 AM
RE: On Cats - Edit 2 - by rollingbrianjones - 01-26-2017, 11:41 AM
RE: On Cats - Edit 2 - by mrweiner - 01-26-2017, 04:02 PM
RE: On Cats - Edit 2 - by RC James - 01-30-2017, 09:44 AM



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