Walkabout - Edit

[QDeathstar]

In the pet store, her eyes nice line break
were like a puppies
before it’s given a treat.

It was November,
and the ground was wet
from last nights rain.i think you have an issue with tense. "from rain the night before" but, honestly it needs to be a bit more interesting. I also think of the guns and roses "cold november rain" which seems like a strange allusion in this peice.

Outside a coffee house
a busker played Hank Williams
and she gave him a cigarette
in lieu of change.

When we got to the park,
she said some trees look better
without their leaves. Sexy, the last stanza is by far the best and is what made me want to respond. Trees look better undressed.