01-23-2017, 02:24 AM
Okay , Hello all! This is my first post. I had written this poem a month or so ago. I tried to do a ABBA rhyming form. I would like to improve this poem with the help from your feedback. Please dont be shy, were all here for peer praise or criticism. Help with edits or word changes or even just to say you enjoyed it. Thanks.
Cannabis
Twas never a more noble plant
A strain to match the brain
Natural chemicals it will supplant
Foundation of neurology
This sacred bliss of cannabis
Essential to our biology
System of endo cannabinoids
From loam to trichome
A substance to fill the voids
Natures most magnificent
A flight of mental height
Always a willing participant
A structure to define beauty
Most sweet of smoke it is to toke
From musk to skunk to fruity
If in nature we were to find
A tree such as thee
The most precious thing to the human mind
We would consume this sticky weed
To smoke or eat a tasty treat
Unlocking our minds to be freed
From conventional thinking
From who to be and what to see
Saved from a ship that's sinking
To soar above and rise against
To fight for your right
No longer to be fenced
Like an animal against its will
The soul creates an open hole
Thoughts have time to distill
Not a great ending but ill work on finishing it when I get some more creativity flowing or suggestions are always appreciated. Thanks and I hope you enjoy.
Cannabis
Twas never a more noble plant
A strain to match the brain
Natural chemicals it will supplant
Foundation of neurology
This sacred bliss of cannabis
Essential to our biology
System of endo cannabinoids
From loam to trichome
A substance to fill the voids
Natures most magnificent
A flight of mental height
Always a willing participant
A structure to define beauty
Most sweet of smoke it is to toke
From musk to skunk to fruity
If in nature we were to find
A tree such as thee
The most precious thing to the human mind
We would consume this sticky weed
To smoke or eat a tasty treat
Unlocking our minds to be freed
From conventional thinking
From who to be and what to see
Saved from a ship that's sinking
To soar above and rise against
To fight for your right
No longer to be fenced
Like an animal against its will
The soul creates an open hole
Thoughts have time to distill
Not a great ending but ill work on finishing it when I get some more creativity flowing or suggestions are always appreciated. Thanks and I hope you enjoy.