01-22-2017, 06:56 AM
Hey Bunx!
I get a nice vibe from this poem. It reminds me of heading to my friends band show and how much of a good time it is.
I feel as though the poem could have a better flow to it, and perhaps even work as a song. I was able to envision a brewery and imagine the setting, but the money aspect of the poem throws me off a bit. Perhaps stronger details on how you feel about the money would have a stronger impact.
Thank you for sharing!
I get a nice vibe from this poem. It reminds me of heading to my friends band show and how much of a good time it is.
I feel as though the poem could have a better flow to it, and perhaps even work as a song. I was able to envision a brewery and imagine the setting, but the money aspect of the poem throws me off a bit. Perhaps stronger details on how you feel about the money would have a stronger impact.
Thank you for sharing!