01-19-2017, 11:24 AM
River: 'I'll violate it anyway' 
Of course you will! Because you can't resist a churchy poem.
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I agree with many of your points, and I think that I might cut out the bird bit and make it into a tiny little haiku or something since you like it.
Carrie: thanks for fluttering by. I think you're right about breaking it up somehow -- probably do some spacing ala billy's crit above. Thanks for critting and welcome to the pen!
Of course you will! Because you can't resist a churchy poem.
>< I agree with many of your points, and I think that I might cut out the bird bit and make it into a tiny little haiku or something since you like it.
Carrie: thanks for fluttering by.
I think you're right about breaking it up somehow -- probably do some spacing ala billy's crit above. Thanks for critting and welcome to the pen!