Walkabout - Edit

[Wjames]

Edit 1:

In the pet store, her eyes
matched the puppy’s.

Outside a coffee house
a busker played Hank Williams,
and she gave him a cigarette.

My boots were damp from the previous night’s rain
and a fog hugged the worms on the sidewalk.

When we got to the park,
she said some trees look better
without their leaves.

First Draft:
In the pet store, her eyes
were like a puppies
before it’s given a treat.

It was November,
and the ground was wet
from last nights rain.

Outside a coffee house
a busker played Hank Williams,
and she gave him a cigarette
in lieu of change.

When we got to the park,
she said some trees look better
without their leaves.