Midnight Dance

[CRNDLSM]

I think you should make the conceit more obvious, maybe even in the title, as sexy as strangulation is for some people, the suicide layer makes it way more ... hilarious, I laughed out loud after reading the intent.  Just knowing the intent made it that much better for me, without the subtlety

Midnight Dance

She calls me over
at the stroke of midnight–
            beckons me
to play some tunes
that we can dance to–
            waltz together
in the night air.
 
She levitates
in aspiration
folding her arms
around my neck–
knotted with lust.
 
With a slight kick
and her tight grip
we sway
back and forth
in a multitude of motions–
freeing my saturnine mind
                        going to black
                                    as my eyes stare
blankly at the wall.