Interpretations
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(01-03-2017, 06:41 AM)Wjames Wrote:  I pretended not to look
as she carved her back
into a statue, and cracked it. This stanzas great, I feel like a creeper who doesn't want to be a creeper.

We were the only ones
in the library, and I was reading
her vertebrae like a poem
I couldn’t understand.this stanza seems to only explain the first one, telling me you're not looking like a creeper, but as a contemplative bystander.  You want to understand but can't.  I love the idea of reading a vertebrae, but overall these could be condensed into one short stanza or altered just enough to show me instead of telling me.  We were the only ones in the library seems unnecessary I guess is the only thing here that doesn't help the piece.

Anyways, I liked it, thanks for posting
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Messages In This Thread
Interpretations - by Wjames - 01-03-2017, 06:41 AM
RE: Interpretations - by dukealien - 01-03-2017, 12:03 PM
RE: Interpretations - by Hkrodgers - 01-05-2017, 03:24 PM
RE: Interpretations - by Rogo - 01-06-2017, 11:57 AM
RE: Interpretations - by CRNDLSM - 01-09-2017, 04:29 AM
RE: Interpretations - by Mark Cecil - 01-11-2017, 08:33 AM
RE: Interpretations - by RiverNotch - 01-13-2017, 10:59 PM
RE: Interpretations - by Lizzie - 01-15-2017, 09:31 AM
RE: Interpretations - by Wjames - 01-18-2017, 06:29 AM
RE: Interpretations - by Rogo - 01-19-2017, 08:24 AM
RE: Interpretations - by Carrie Birdsong - 01-19-2017, 10:16 AM



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