race

[billy]

i like it though i'm also of a mind that 575 isn't mandatory and is a western invention; though it can of course be used to learn structure or simply because the poet wishes to use it.

while i do like the poem; senryu, i personally think it works better without [the] and your. though if the poem is to be read as poem to the reader and not as a statement then leave as is.

race
 
being an asshole
has nothing to do with the
color of your skin
 
 
erthona
 
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