01-08-2017, 05:36 AM
I don't live in Scotland, you knob 
The Tweed River here at the coast is the border between NSW and Qld. The vernacular is specific to the place. "Where are you going tonight?" "Down the dockside bar for a few coldies mate."
"Balmy eve" is important as Mike is also a knob, although of a different sort. He sees Jess as a cliche.
Sapphic odes don't rhyme. It's about the meter:
Trochee/ trochee/ dactyl/ trochee/ trochee
Trochee/ trochee/ dactyl/ trochee/ trochee
Trochee/ trochee/ dactyl/ trochee/ trochee
Dactyl/ trochee
Will think on "remnants". How would "flotsam" work?
Nobody's saying owt to anyone. Omniscient narrator -- I guess that's out of favour with today's privilege of I.
If you can think of a substitute for "team" that's not going to screw up the dactyl, I'm all ears.
Mike is not a protector, though no doubt he thinks he is. He protects her from ever having to interact with the world again. Would it be clearer if I had "When the knock came, grandmother knew the reason"?
The Tweed River here at the coast is the border between NSW and Qld. The vernacular is specific to the place. "Where are you going tonight?" "Down the dockside bar for a few coldies mate.""Balmy eve" is important as Mike is also a knob, although of a different sort. He sees Jess as a cliche.
Sapphic odes don't rhyme. It's about the meter:
Trochee/ trochee/ dactyl/ trochee/ trochee
Trochee/ trochee/ dactyl/ trochee/ trochee
Trochee/ trochee/ dactyl/ trochee/ trochee
Dactyl/ trochee
Will think on "remnants". How would "flotsam" work?
Nobody's saying owt to anyone. Omniscient narrator -- I guess that's out of favour with today's privilege of I.
If you can think of a substitute for "team" that's not going to screw up the dactyl, I'm all ears.
Mike is not a protector, though no doubt he thinks he is. He protects her from ever having to interact with the world again. Would it be clearer if I had "When the knock came, grandmother knew the reason"?
It could be worse