Devolution

[rollingbrianjones]

If you want perfect meter, simply hand write or print it and dot dash the stresses- then change as necessary. But not at the cost of quality.

After reading your response and your intention, I'd certainly consider the conclusion- at some length with dramatic revision.
Your first two stanzas describing our negative behaviours and our faults make a pretty strong case against God to the non believer - or at least make the case for his sustained absence.
By then referring to something (if true) that happened 2000 years ago, and before the faults you previously described in stanzas 1 & 2, there is no convincing end. This is from someone non-religious but open minded.
Your case for God needs to contradict the first two stanzas description of our failings. Or explain them. Of course this is difficult- but if you want to affect the reader, you won't do it by talking about Jesus and Calvary way back in time. Ask the non believing reader questions they find hard to answer- don't throw at them a belief.