01-07-2017, 09:45 AM
Today is a perfect day
When two hearts entwine as they may
It’s the beginning of an everlasting journey
And the freedom of love now shines its beauty
Feel like I could take this out based on your comments - I'm sitting 50/50 on leaving it in or removing
Standing in glorious oneness
Oh, thank the Lord for his greatness
For bringing two souls down a painted path (broken or match doesn't feel like the right fit for the message I am trying to get across - does two instead of perfect work?)
From creating life through to the aftermath (hmm, yea - kind of stuck on this one. I am trying to say they are on a journey from creating life (having kids) to death do us part which is where I used the word aftermath)
Unravelling the rose to the warmth of the sun (removed 'every layer of the')
Infused with protection and serenity (removed caressing every cell)
Fresh dew touching each petal without fear of vulnerability (added 'each)
It is time to just be
Swirling through all the colours of the rainbow (changed 'every' to 'all the')
Being carried with godly hands down a waterfall (removed 'drifting through clouds')
Moments without hope for more than what they already are
Dreams do come true
May you dance with your children
Let the world see your wholeness
Let the joys and sorrows make you stronger
May your dreams interweave full of colour and beauty
Let love be the gentle breeze
Let it cleanse and wash your soul
May you honour and respect each others individuality
May your love glisten and shine and glow to the skies
Be proud, be brave, be strong with humility (humble)
May you both become one.
When two hearts entwine as they may
It’s the beginning of an everlasting journey
And the freedom of love now shines its beauty
Feel like I could take this out based on your comments - I'm sitting 50/50 on leaving it in or removing
Standing in glorious oneness
Oh, thank the Lord for his greatness
For bringing two souls down a painted path (broken or match doesn't feel like the right fit for the message I am trying to get across - does two instead of perfect work?)
From creating life through to the aftermath (hmm, yea - kind of stuck on this one. I am trying to say they are on a journey from creating life (having kids) to death do us part which is where I used the word aftermath)
Unravelling the rose to the warmth of the sun (removed 'every layer of the')
Infused with protection and serenity (removed caressing every cell)
Fresh dew touching each petal without fear of vulnerability (added 'each)
It is time to just be
Swirling through all the colours of the rainbow (changed 'every' to 'all the')
Being carried with godly hands down a waterfall (removed 'drifting through clouds')
Moments without hope for more than what they already are
Dreams do come true
May you dance with your children
Let the world see your wholeness
Let the joys and sorrows make you stronger
May your dreams interweave full of colour and beauty
Let love be the gentle breeze
Let it cleanse and wash your soul
May you honour and respect each others individuality
May your love glisten and shine and glow to the skies
Be proud, be brave, be strong with humility (humble)
May you both become one.