01-04-2017, 08:37 AM
(01-03-2017, 10:12 AM)Coquette16 Wrote: One Solution
Consider the illusion - I don't think you should use illusion, that suggests that us offering one solution is an illusion - a false belief, etc. I think illusion is the opposite of what you want to say.
that we could make a difference
by offering one solution.
there would be no testing or trial runs,
we would just do our best—
we would stick to our guns. This is the line I'm not quite sure about. I think the idea of what you want to say is good, I just think it should be worded differently.
The world would flow nicely,
like a well-oiled machine.
There would be no sounds of dissension,
we would all pay attention.
Simply
because
we offered the world
one solution.
