01-03-2017, 08:41 AM
(01-02-2017, 12:46 PM)Rogo Wrote: “Architectures”
Hi, not a lot to go go, rogo...this is genre stuff and none the worse for that. Trouble is, because only you KNOW what its intent is, all we are left with is spelling and grammar to workshop....so I do not believe you WANT critique, just understanding. I can help you there....I don't understand it.
From the pluralising of architecture (perfectly permissable but esoteric in this context) an oddness creeps in. Pyrolysis is right up my street but what meaneth it in this taciturn arena? Beats me.
So overall, it is just, to me...gar
-bage.
Tell me I am wr
-ong.
After all, I am just a question.
Nothing poetic here. No style, metaphor, rhyme or reason. The last is the killler for me.
If you can clear up any misconceptions on my part I will try to advise...as it is, this is intuhlectuarly over my head. By the by...what do you think of the King's new clothes?
Best,
tectak
fuse from pyro
-lysis titled
spines wind in
tidal air arch
-ipelago jet & arrows
narrowed their beams thru kind
-led oxygen who answers
“I am just
an answer”