I Wonder

[VINTAGEM]

This is my first time accepting critique on my poems so I'm going to put this in the novice section...lol...I hope it's okay...
thank you

I read through the poem the lines breaks however seem to come at random times, I cannot see sentence formation and punctuation at all, maybe it just got incorrectly formatted. Having said that the imagery of black smoke is nice but the poem does not follow sequence, it hops around the place. The title also seems unrelated to the poem itself. Other than that with work I  forsee a good poem coming out of this.

I Wonder

we
siege the forest.

as dawn approaches
waterfalls
and I
sit alone
inside
the empty
stall–

my fingers
trail
like lead
and quake
like thunder
and us,
I wonder.

inhaling the black
that slips from our mouths
and we suck it back.

the nightingale
that sleeps
as we
split the
upper seams
of our shirts
as breathing hurts
and us,
still I wonder–

why I'm yearning the black
that slips from our mouths
and we suck it back.