12-30-2016, 05:20 AM
Great stuff mahj. Thank you.
This is about feeling rather than seeing...so "blue" is the state of feeling sad....implied and I hope translatable.
As you will see, I sneaked an edit in. You and I had the same thoughts.
It was a long time back, but the piece begins with an "If..." and ends with a denial...a "but".
The rhyme scheme is circular to emphasise the loop...perhaps it hasn't worked. I will look again. I eat all crit.
Thanks again.
best,
tectak
This is about feeling rather than seeing...so "blue" is the state of feeling sad....implied and I hope translatable.
As you will see, I sneaked an edit in. You and I had the same thoughts.
It was a long time back, but the piece begins with an "If..." and ends with a denial...a "but".
The rhyme scheme is circular to emphasise the loop...perhaps it hasn't worked. I will look again. I eat all crit.
Thanks again.
best,
tectak