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The Funeral of Mark Cecil
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12-20-2016, 09:23 AM
The conceit is good, so you have a solid base to work from. Except for 'je suis Mark Cecil', there's not much in the way of original description or imagery. Hardly any metaphor or simile. That's what's lacking for me -- too much tell and not enough show. I'll look for a revision on this one, because you have a good "storyline" to work from.
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The Funeral of Mark Cecil - by Mark Cecil - 12-10-2016, 08:03 AM
RE: The Funeral of Mark Cecil - by aschueler - 12-19-2016, 04:42 AM
RE: The Funeral of Mark Cecil - by RiverNotch - 12-19-2016, 04:08 PM
RE: The Funeral of Mark Cecil - by Lizzie - 12-20-2016, 09:23 AM
RE: The Funeral of Mark Cecil - by Mark Cecil - 12-28-2016, 06:23 AM
RE: The Funeral of Mark Cecil - by Brownlie - 12-31-2016, 03:41 AM
RE: The Funeral of Mark Cecil - by Erthona - 12-31-2016, 11:38 PM
RE: The Funeral of Mark Cecil - by Mark Cecil - 01-01-2017, 07:12 AM
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