12-16-2016, 01:43 PM
(12-14-2016, 02:22 PM)rowens Wrote: Everything I say in response to the comments on my poems are extensions of the poems, and not necessarily my personal opinions, since I don't have a personality.i suppose that's the golden rule with workshopping forums:
when you defy criticism, defy it with style.
i remember reading somewhere (maybe gleaned from Frye) that all criticism exist in worlds of their own, just as all art exist in worlds of their own -- if art is the middle man between realization and the individual, then criticism is the middle man between art and society. i also remember reading somewhere (maybe on a review of the video game The Beginner's Guide) that all criticism was a fruitless endeavors, misapplying either broad truths or really off-the-mark personal details to the works of art they comment on. luckily, i treat this forum more as a technical workshop, where we're free to indulge in the most subjective, most biased comments possible -- comments on style -- all for the sake of shaping others' pieces into forms we better like, or forms we think would be better liked (but in truth would probably be better liked only by our peers, never as numerous as they seem), and really, though that's kinda destructive, the poet dies when his art is given up to his readers, anyway, and i suppose that's the real point of a forum such as this. so, returning to the piece, what can or should i Criticize? maybe in twenty years -- like The Beginner's Guide, it defies Criticism. but what can i criticize? like billy said, that last line reads superfluous -- the penultimate line, too, but in that case it's a way that reads more integral, the intended superfluity you mentioned rather than the imitation Bob Dylan i read. otherwise, lovely work.
and here i hope i imitated right, if this were imitation at all.