Solitaire
#2
I must say I do like those first two lines on S1, brilliant.
The rest is too vague to match the opening lines, and somewhat of a let down.
If it were mine I would stick to the micro details,
which often speak louder than dramatic oratorical statements.



(12-16-2016, 07:24 AM)Wjames Wrote:  I poisoned the daisies with ashes and butts
while plumbing the annals of Playboys and sluts
I’d been with when I was alone.

I trampled the corpses and walked back inside
to turn on the tv and placate my mind
with voices that were not my own.
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Solitaire - by Wjames - 12-16-2016, 07:24 AM
RE: Solitaire - by Sparkydashforth - 12-16-2016, 09:24 AM
RE: Solitaire - by RiverNotch - 12-16-2016, 01:24 PM
RE: Solitaire - by Lizzie - 12-17-2016, 08:11 AM
RE: Solitaire - by Achebe - 12-17-2016, 08:13 AM
RE: Solitaire - by ryanjr - 01-22-2017, 09:28 AM
RE: Solitaire - by vagabond - 05-09-2017, 08:06 PM



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