12-15-2016, 12:32 AM
Thanks for the feedback! The siggy's the thing at the bottom, not the title. The title isn't under my control, but I do agree, it's quite apt ----- though I'm not sure if I should take that as a personal attack. Just because the speaker's flashy, doesn't mean I am (though I'm a little, when writing) ---- and just because what you've written isn't flashy, doesn't mean you are (though what you've so far presented is vivid, when it works). I'll offer a fuller response when I've got more feedback, but one thing I did forget is to remove "cloth" from the scarabs, as when they opened Jesus' tomb I think they found his bindings? Maybe I'll go with blood, or some other universal organ. Again, thanks!