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Water and Sky (Thread Closed)
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12-13-2016, 03:50 PM
I would find it more interesting if you exchanged some of the verbs for more colorful ones, or rearranged a few sentences beginning with I. As is, it strikes me as a bit repetitive.
(Also, take with a grain of salt. Utter amateur here)
I relish writing bad poems, if it means someday I'll write a good one.
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Water and Sky (Thread Closed) - by mv5543 - 12-12-2016, 06:00 AM
RE: Water and Sky - by Alexis Of Wonderland - 12-13-2016, 11:41 AM
RE: Water and Sky - by Wjames - 12-13-2016, 02:56 PM
RE: Water and Sky - by Merrikay - 12-13-2016, 03:50 PM
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