Lifespans
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Proverbial. Though ending on a log feels redundant -- there was a sense of outward movement that was just stopped dead by that last line. Something else -- I keep thinking God, but that might make this too didactic (especially against Creationists) -- still, the perfection of the rhyme is expendable. Lovely work.
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Lifespans - by Wjames - 12-08-2016, 05:24 AM
RE: Lifespans - by Sparkydashforth - 12-08-2016, 07:34 AM
RE: Lifespans - by Mahjong - 12-08-2016, 11:54 AM
RE: Lifespans - by RiverNotch - 12-08-2016, 01:37 PM
RE: Lifespans - by Wjames - 12-09-2016, 06:01 AM



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