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The maniac

theredbaron
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11-28-2016, 10:17 AM

I find this line too technical-sounding

Quote:As his condition worsens further

Perhaps it can be said in a more poetic or direct way.

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The maniac - by Mark Cecil - 11-24-2016, 08:13 AM

RE: The maniac - by CRNDLSM - 11-25-2016, 01:46 AM

RE: The maniac - by Mark Cecil - 11-27-2016, 02:11 AM

RE: The maniac - by Alic Elliot - 11-28-2016, 01:46 AM

RE: The maniac - by theredbaron - 11-28-2016, 10:17 AM

RE: The maniac - by Mark Cecil - 11-29-2016, 07:56 PM

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