Unraveling

[Sparkydashforth]

Hi Starlight,

Edit I: 

A simple word shatters:  ............You start the poem with a conundrum, nothing wrong with that, but I feel some
preface to the "word" might add to the clarity here.  Why does the "simple word" shatter?
 a thousand lost connections, ................like this line  - it points to memory and false memory
the tightly twisted knots untangle.....................I would cut 'the"
 
The mumbled mice of mind ..........the alliteration feels forced to me.
Skitter scamper squeak in brash commotion.................nice sounds
Drowning out sound notions.............what is a "sound notion"? needs more clarity.
 
Three six five, just letters:................sorry but I don't get this - again I feel you need more explanation
The meaning as fallible as the mind
That promised to hold on to it............last line falls a little flat

Good write but I think you could expand on the theme and revise.


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A simple word shatters at the thought
of a million of lost connections
A million tightly twisted knots unravel
 
The unintelligible mice of mind
Skitter scamper squeak
in overpowering commotion,
Drowning out your own name
 
Waiting for the day when numbers
order the way they're ordered to
Three six five, just letters,
The meaning as fragile
As the fallibility of the mind
That promised to hold on to it