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What do you want of me?
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11-27-2016, 12:13 AM
I might be hypocritically in saying this because a few of my poems have repetition in them. But I wonder whether you would consider taking out the line: "What do you want of me father?" except from the start as it seems to lose its impact as the poem goes on.
Poetry is the unexpected utterance of the soul
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What do you want of me? - by Jo Frumple - 11-23-2016, 07:24 AM
RE: What do you want of me? - by Coquette16 - 11-24-2016, 09:33 AM
RE: What do you want of me? - by Jo Frumple - 11-26-2016, 08:34 AM
RE: What do you want of me? - by theredbaron - 11-26-2016, 12:10 PM
RE: What do you want of me? - by Jo Frumple - 11-30-2016, 11:36 AM
RE: What do you want of me? - by Mark Cecil - 11-27-2016, 12:13 AM
RE: What do you want of me? - by Sparkydashforth - 11-27-2016, 01:39 AM
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