Do You Have Anything Good in that Needle?

[just mercedes]

Hi Lizzie - I'm not sure if you want critters here or not. I'll just repeat that the verb 'to be' makes your opening lines in the first two stanzas too passive for me - find a way to make them active, to seize your reader's attention. 'Assures' appears twice, in the last two stanzas; maybe you can change one use. I love to see dialogue in poetry, but you can introduce it without the 'she says', 'he says', 'I say'.

A good snapshot of time and place, and a look at the public person we project, contrasted by our private thoughts.