11-25-2016, 06:27 AM
Thanks, Sparky.
I will keep grinding. Possibly I will try to cast this material in some 'freer' verse, outside the sonnet form. Busy this afternoon, but I did spend some time reading up on inversion in poetry this morning--and not just Shakespeare, for whom inversion was a central devise for rhyming and other effects (e.g., https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems-a...tail/43707). All the comments above seem immediately to balk at inversion as bad. Clearly this is not the case, as there are entire poems composed of it. It must be that my execution of it is bad. I am trying to break this material out by casting it in a form that is strikingly dissimilar to the straightforward prose of the short story. Again, I'll keep at it. Thanks again!
I will keep grinding. Possibly I will try to cast this material in some 'freer' verse, outside the sonnet form. Busy this afternoon, but I did spend some time reading up on inversion in poetry this morning--and not just Shakespeare, for whom inversion was a central devise for rhyming and other effects (e.g., https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems-a...tail/43707). All the comments above seem immediately to balk at inversion as bad. Clearly this is not the case, as there are entire poems composed of it. It must be that my execution of it is bad. I am trying to break this material out by casting it in a form that is strikingly dissimilar to the straightforward prose of the short story. Again, I'll keep at it. Thanks again!