Gastronomic Wrinkles in a Porous Continuum

[Alic Elliot]

Hmm..

After reviewing the critique tips, I'm going to revise my own critique.

I still believe that stanzas 3-5 can be changed. Maybe not scratched entirely, but three long-ish stanzas about lunch at Wendy's is just not that intetesting. Furthermore, I can't tell if this is detachment or Invasion of the Body Snatchers. Sometimes it seems one way, other times the other. Is it supposed to be a grey-ish line? Lastly, it does tell an interesting story, but there are weird little details. 'Pack of peccadilloes' - would a bunch of small issues cause a woman to scream?

Best, Alic