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[Jo Frumple]

I like it, I like it! Very good!
These lines kinda struck me as could be better by way of rolling off the tongue. Vocabulary and feel of the piece are excellent.

"Our faint ideas of the world"
Idk, just maybe saying "Our faintest ideas of the world" or just "faintest ideas of the world" or changing the to this "our faint ideas of this world". I just think you could make it a stronger better line if you added an "s'' sound in there.

I see you edited the "a cloak" line. Idk, I almost like "a cloak over genuine meaning" better...

What would you think about switching the "us" and "ourselves" around? And maybe cutting "our"? So it would be:
"We lay at the mercy of selves
As we let us into the embrace"

Also what if you struck the 'the' and made 'embrace' plural?
'As we let us into embraces'?  I like that. Gives it a very good ending, very mystical and shadowy like the poem.

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Edit 1:

We stand in this delectable land,
a casing, enveloping truth.

We live in a world sightless,
our faint ideas of the world.    

A false belief is delivered,
a love that leaves us bland 

a complex matrix of man,
a cloak over sincerity.

An embrace, that fixates,
an untrue fleeting grace.

We lie at the mercy of us,
As we let ourselves into the embrace.

Original :

We stand in this delectable land
A casing, enveloping truth

We live in a world sheathed,
Our faint ideas of the world

A false belief is delivered 
A love that leaves us bland 

A complex matrix of man
A cloak over genuine meaning 

An embrace that fixates
An untrue fleeting grace 

We lay at the mercy of us
As we let ourselves into the embrace