I am thinking of you (fragment)

[Sparkydashforth]

Like this.

I am thinking of you
in the slow train's rolling,..................love the movement in these lines
in double glazed harbour windows passing by;............don't get the 'harbor" allusion. Otherwise good imagery.

and the stories within them,
the shadowy lives
of unsaluted lovers .................good lines
for whom no bells are tolling.....................this twisted quote does not work for me. Nothing to suggest, but I am sure you can find a stronger end line.