Living with Carpenter Bees

[Sparkydashforth]

Hi Achebe

thanks for the initial positive comments. I had not thought of cutting the chipmunks out....might work -
will consider!

Obliged!

Sparky - I'll return to this later. I've enjoyed all three of your poems posted this far. You have a flair for description that's extraordinary.
For now and for this piece my only suggestion would be to rethink the 'chipmunk' line - after bees, baby mice, and before centipede, it overloads the menagerie. I'd prefer going stratigjt to the centipede.
Ciao