No thing there-edit #1

[Lizzie]

My issue is with the lack of concrete imagery. Entity, dream, emptiness, between, quintessence -- they're not moving me toward a better understanding of the subject. They are all different ways of saying 'this thing is amorphous and unknowable.' You have waves and Solomon's Seal, and the curtain opening on the dance which is very theatrical (I like it), and those things are evocative. Even if you only have a few palpable descriptors, that's enough, if they're the right ones. But, using vague words to define the vagueness isn't speaking to me.

I think you could really do something great with the curtain opening/dance imagery. Maybe there are elements of a dance that could be related to the subject and bring it 'down to earth,' as it were.

I hope this helps. If anything isn't articulated well, just ask. I'm having a hard time coming up with the right words (ironic since I'm a writer )

lizziep

Hi Lizzie - it's impossible to speak in concrete images of No Thing. Maybe this short page can help you. 

https://books.google.co.nz/books?id=vhWrjVscOj8C&pg=PA9&lpg=PA9&dq=is+limbo+finite+or+infinite&source=bl&ots=JdvAow1PeK&sig=Vn_02vDvObqOmep29ZpfkHEERvE&hl=en&sa=X&ved=0ahUKEwjDvcH_lZrQAhVFJZQKHaAJBKcQ6AEIGTAA#v=onepage&q=is%20limbo%20finite%20or%20infinite&f=false

Ok, I see what you're saying. Sorry my crit wasn't helpful.