Knuckle Sandwiches and White Rice

[Emz]

Dear Krakus,

I agree with others about the large writing being off-putting, but your rhyming and flow kept your poem moving which is good.

In terms of content, it is an interesting take for the narrator (one victim in the narrative) to express their feelings so harshly to another victim of the story, like the narrator is angrier at another victim rather than the perpetrator. You are telling the story from what feels like very fresh wounds to the character/narrator, and that makes me as a reader feel uncomfortable (which is sometimes the purpose of poetry!). For these reasons I found it an interesting and enjoyable read.

I would be curious to see how you would write these issues from the perspective of a narrator who has had distance from the situation, just enough distance to provide some empathy towards the other characters in the narrative, yet fresh enough to keep us in the story as you demonstrated here. (Best of both worlds, perhaps?)

Emma