To the Pathologically Bored American Man

[Lizzie]

Genuinely enjoyed reading this, totally got the subject matter, assume there is a personal context and glad you at least feel that firstly, things have moved on... and secondly that there is at least to you some positive of a generation engrossed staring into their technology! Feeling this is personal, there is no critiquing your feelings and any specific instances you are thinking of - but my main criticism in terms of subject matter is a glaring question, have things really moved on in general? Perhaps in your instance. But broadly speaking? Perhaps you don't wish to speak broadly but I sense in places you do.

I do think that you're right that I would love to be able to speak universally and with confidence, but all I really know is what I've seen, so I'm going to have to leave the bigger questions up to the reader. I doubt that anybody's existential dilemmas will be answered by one of my poems, as much as I'd love to think they would.

So, yes the piece is coming out of real world experience, but my goal for the piece is for it to speak on a broader scale, so if it fails to do that then I want to know. If it was merely personal, I wouldn't put it here, so no worries on critiquing anything that you need to.

Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts. Appreciate it.

lizziep