11-04-2016, 06:38 AM
Hi Zorcas - I really think you're having a lend of the members here.
After the length of time you've spent here, and the lessons you have read, I have to say, Don't give up your day job.
Why the quotes? Why the uneven use of quotation marks? What have the quoted passages to do with the cat? Why is a cat eating blueberries?
There's nothing poetic about this load of old rubbish, for me. And I speak as a poetry editor with years of experience. I really think you did better when you knew nothing about poetry. You're trying to write a meta poem, judging by the title, but you haven't achieved that.
You need to interest your reader, not insult them. If Mills and Boon is your preferred reading, how do you think you will ever comprehend Milton?
After the length of time you've spent here, and the lessons you have read, I have to say, Don't give up your day job.
Why the quotes? Why the uneven use of quotation marks? What have the quoted passages to do with the cat? Why is a cat eating blueberries?
There's nothing poetic about this load of old rubbish, for me. And I speak as a poetry editor with years of experience. I really think you did better when you knew nothing about poetry. You're trying to write a meta poem, judging by the title, but you haven't achieved that.
You need to interest your reader, not insult them. If Mills and Boon is your preferred reading, how do you think you will ever comprehend Milton?