11-03-2016, 04:32 AM
You have a nice flow going on throughout the poem and I like the way you have some random rhyming throughout which makes the poem a joy to read e.g.
Were you ashamed that you couldn't get away and find something more? Were you keeping score? Counting all the times he turned off the lights and called you a whore?
Were you ashamed that you couldn't get away and find something more? Were you keeping score? Counting all the times he turned off the lights and called you a whore?
Poetry is the unexpected utterance of the soul
Mark Nepo
Mark Nepo