< all day at the dump >

[Lizzie]

Ray, this is f*****g amazing. My favorite bits:

   
                                                    < all day at the dump >
   
                                                loose and crazy these female dinosaurs
                                                busy buttering hunk to hunk
                                                loose only for a piece of rump
                                                and give me some toast
                                                let me watch the sun
                                                as it touches off flowers like dynamite -- such an unexpected comparison
                                                like fireflies on nuclear power cycles
                                                honest-to-god real lightning and thunder bugs
                                                bumblebees big as mountains but turning on dimes -- big as mountains for bumblebees??? I love it. I love it even more because bumblers are my favorite bees.

                                                stay out of their way -- what's great about this is that I don't know if you're referring to the females or to the bumblers, but it makes no never mind

                                                who gave me this day? -- lovely existential questions fleshed out in this stanza, feeling natural and not over-wrought
                                                it's plain
                                                it's gray
                                                it's got nothing to say
                                                it shipped me live
                                                next day express
                                                and now i'm new jersey
                                                and i should have been new york
                                                and i should have been a nice house and a pretty garden -- love new jersey through this line -- my favorite bits
                                                and not this beat-up cardboard box with a wet bottom
                                                but my top's dry
                                                begging
                                                to be set on fire -- perfect ending
   
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I don't think the picture adds anything, though. My mental images are much more interesting.