Rain Dance

[kolemath]

yeah i could do without the final stanza too as it throws off the rhythm/repetition. it works though, like another bible verse.

Lord of the sun. some consistency issues in the poem. take for example this line you end with a period, while all other stanza openers are followed by commas. i'd stick with commas
Humble, you cover the land. good connection: sun to land cover to heat
The grains of my guilt grow hotter;
keep me cool in you're infinite fans. like the duke said, some of these modern tech examples are a bit jarring but i'm not against their presence in the poem. they kind of update old wisdom

Lord of the wind,
carry me in your hands;
lift me up when I falter;
support me that I may stand. a bit abstract in this stanza but not a bad stanza

Lord of the earth,
let the river flow through your dams.
My roots will wilt without water,
disintegrating in the sand.

Lord of the trees, 
it's limiting growth in your plants, back to the inconsistencies in the poem, this stanza is unlike the others. L2 is quite confusing actually. i want to say you were going for possessive 'its,' as 'it is limiting growth' is almost nonsense. btw, that is 'it's' referring to anyway?
anxiously awaiting the thunder
that signals the end of their dance. i can't pull a clear main verb from this stanza and the grammatical subject is 'it' which doesn't clearly refer to another noun. 

Lord of the beasts,
I'm doing the best that I can, a weaker stanza of the poem..the seamless transition of images (as you demonstrate in S1 from sun to cover to heat to fans) doesn't happen here..beasts to trying hard, no, beasts to hunger, yes, but hunger to running, no, but beasts to ran, yes.
but nothing compares to your hunger.
When you came to me, I ran.

Lord of kings,
I'm not an innocent man,
but like David before the altar,
it's justice that you demand. good connection from innocent to justice but abstract.

God is truth, love, and infinite.
God is in all things.
God is good.

overall a good read. thanks