10-27-2016, 05:44 PM
Brownlie,
It's always been my favorite holiday. Unfortunately my kids are to old for that now, but it was great fun while it lasted.
dale
kolemath,
The "dark Santas in reverse" is explain in the following lines. The reverse is that they come to take not to give. The noun-verb for the stanza is "they drag". You are right about too many commas, a well placed colon would help.
S2 L2 should be implied that (the children are) "flying like a pack of witches", but you are correct about the punctuation. I shall do corrections before the next Halloween.
S3 L1 "fall" is the verb, although it probably needs different punctuation to make that clear.
S3 L2 Refers to S3 L1, L1 being symbolic speech. In other words the speakers is saying he has seen other sugar crashes after other Halloweens and this one is not worse than those.
If one removed the "with" this is how it would read:
"just the signal that we're through,
this latest Halloween!
"with" lets the reader know it is this particular Halloween, not just Halloween in general.
Thanks for the comments,
dale
It's always been my favorite holiday. Unfortunately my kids are to old for that now, but it was great fun while it lasted.
dale
kolemath,
The "dark Santas in reverse" is explain in the following lines. The reverse is that they come to take not to give. The noun-verb for the stanza is "they drag". You are right about too many commas, a well placed colon would help.
S2 L2 should be implied that (the children are) "flying like a pack of witches", but you are correct about the punctuation. I shall do corrections before the next Halloween.
S3 L1 "fall" is the verb, although it probably needs different punctuation to make that clear.
S3 L2 Refers to S3 L1, L1 being symbolic speech. In other words the speakers is saying he has seen other sugar crashes after other Halloweens and this one is not worse than those.
If one removed the "with" this is how it would read:
"just the signal that we're through,
this latest Halloween!
"with" lets the reader know it is this particular Halloween, not just Halloween in general.
Thanks for the comments,
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.