The Latest Halloween

[kolemath]

The Latest Halloween

Twilight time, the ghouls unleashed,
like dark Santas in reverse, would a dark santa in reverse be a regular santa?
to each house they drag their bags,
saying lines so oft rehearsed. no main verb in this stanza

'Trick-or-Treat' means give me candy,
with each assault upon the doors,
flying like a pack of witches, no clear subject in this line; the stanza is hyper-comma-ized; i'd put a period after candy and insert a grammatical subject in for lines 2-4. 
greedy to collect still more.

Sugar coma, the mighty fall, no main verb for the subject 'sugar coma.'
still no worse than I have seen, abstraction, little to go on here
just the signal that we're through,
with this latest Halloween! doubling up on prepositions is clunky. you don't need the comma after 'through' or the 2nd preposition 'with.'


Erthona

thanks for posting so festively. overall a good read for this month